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MonkeyV
hi, i am a member of the writers club. unfortunately, i got banned from the BBS for a week as gunground said, so i will just post comments here:
over all, i liked the story. i think you may want to change "see-able" to "visible" and fix a few other grammar errors along the way. also i would advise using spell check to fix some other errors i saw. other than that, nice story. it was nice and smooth and sounded great. (:
SupraZerg
indeed, its noticeable my first language is not english, huh?
but thanks for that... constructive critic.